Editing by classmates

1. Many Korean recommend Sin-saimdang at first if somebody ask you ideal mother : you를 바꿔야
2. People choose the nations according to their taste : countries가 좀더 좋은 표현
3. She didn't look like to sacrifice her times for children. : seem으로 대체
4. I can expect comfortable life : a가 있어야
5. Those financial situation lead to jump into struggle for jobs. : jumping into or jump into를 지움
6. people who need the help.: the를 some, my로 대체
7. It is worth to challenge even though many expected difficulties that weren't mentioned up, because the possibility of the happy silver life is higher in Philippines than in Korea.: challeging, regardless of
8. the menu of the breakfast -> the menu of a break or menu deleted
8. it is recommended for tour places which have amusement parks, zoos, aquariums, theme parks or beaches.
it 가주어 나올 장소가 아님,
9. To seniors, they prefer a historical place, a religion place or a hot spring resort. -> Seniors prefer
10. These days, they developed luxury pool villas in Asia. -> have deleoped
11.We may attend relatives' wedding ceremonies by force soon after quarreling with our husband. -> a (our가 공유의 의미로 받아들여질수도 있다)
12. We may change our goals in the work place and move to another department. -> or가 더 적합
13. We make new relationship with people related to family-in-law, but, on the other hand, we can lose partially old relationship that we have made before marriage. -> on the other hand를 빼는게 낫다. but에 반대의 의미가 있으므로, partially를 lose앞으로
14. For various reasons, recently it has become very common, and it affects all levels of society. In the past, divorce was quite rare. -> 순서가 부자연스럽다. 빈도는 빈도끼리 묶는게 자연스럽다.
15. Even so, all married couples having some problems could not get divorced. -> with ,문장끝인데 이유가 불명확. could대신 일반동사로 바꿔줘야 (부분부정)
16. Also, because they feel a difference of an emotional expression of the love or complaint, they sometimes misunderstand each other.
17. in general, when a man occurs to a problem, gets off a conclusion quickly and think to solve the problems
18. the divorce ratio will reduce if people should prepare the attitude thoroughly how to live in a marriage, to recognize the difference from each other, and to make up for their weak point together. -> ratio는 비율, rate가 좋음